1) As I quietly tiptoe into today's Challenge letter "Q" (quintessentially the most challenging letter of all), I quickly realize I'll have to strike up some creativity!
2) As I tiptoe into today's Challenge letter "Q" (the most challenging letter of all), I realize I'll have to strike up some creativity!
Which style is better? I contend #2 is better for a concise, smooth read. There's no need to use "quietly"--that's the only way one can tiptoe. And the other q adverbs are superfluous.
But when I first started writing, my style was much closer to #1. I bled adverbs like a stuck pig (and I used a lot of clichés too, but that's for another post.)
Jen: Hi, I'm Jen, and I'm an adverb abuser.
All: Hi, Jen!
Jen: It all started when I didn't appreciate the intelligence of my readers. I mistakenly thought I had to spell out every action, every feeling.
All: What a mistake...
Want to join the support group? ;-)
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2) As I tiptoe into today's Challenge letter "Q" (the most challenging letter of all), I realize I'll have to strike up some creativity!
Which style is better? I contend #2 is better for a concise, smooth read. There's no need to use "quietly"--that's the only way one can tiptoe. And the other q adverbs are superfluous.
But when I first started writing, my style was much closer to #1. I bled adverbs like a stuck pig (and I used a lot of clichés too, but that's for another post.)
~The Adverb Abuser Support Group~
Jen: Hi, I'm Jen, and I'm an adverb abuser.
All: Hi, Jen!
Jen: It all started when I didn't appreciate the intelligence of my readers. I mistakenly thought I had to spell out every action, every feeling.
All: What a mistake...
Want to join the support group? ;-)
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Hi L.G., the "ly" search is a great idea! I find myself vomiting adverbs on my first draft and now I try to remove them when I edit.
Writing is a learining experience!
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I tried very hard with my next book release not go overboard, so I am aware of it. I guess I haven't hit rock bottom yet and don't really want to get better even though I pretend I do. :)
Great post.
I like that metaphor (simile?) Roland! I formerly wrote jalepeno and now I try to write a more mild flavor.
Carol, we won't let you in to the support group. Your writing is too beautiful. :D
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